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Post Can anybody help me to check the grammar of this essay?
Euthanasia can have many advantages. Basically, Euthanasia limited to those who has brain defectives, coma symptoms, or near dying is inevitable. Patient who has food eating and treatment suffering is also a must. For these patients, socializing is nearly disappearing, or value of life and belief vanished, or faith of beliefing the existence of life is no longer exist. Increase their living of life is actually dragging them toward death and pain. Therefore, promote Euthanasia is matching their self interests.

Euthanasia is also benefits to their relatives. Their relatives are responsible for caring for them. But, it is a waste of effort on a meaningful life for the sake of an unhappy life and it is also consider too much of needs for a patient. For the patient, relative had been suffer extreme emotional and economic pressure. They are in a state of oblivion. Euthanasia will release all these pressures and suffering.


Tue Sep 02, 2008 3:01 am
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Post Re: Can anybody help me to check the grammar of this essay?
Hi! Check out this corrected paragraphs.

Euthanasia can have many advantages. Basically, euthanasia is limited to those who have brain defects, are in a coma, or when dying is inevitable. Patients who have difficulty in eating and those who are suffering terribly are also candidates for this. For these patients, the value of life is almost nil and the importance of the existence of life is no longer viable. Trying to prolong their lives is actually driving them to more suffering. Therefore, I think euthanasia is an option for these people.

Euthanasia also benefits the relatives. The patients' relatives are responsible for caring for them. But, it is a waste of time and effort to take care of a patient who is almost a vegetable and the patient may also be too tired and too sick to care. For the patient's relatives, they might suffer extreme emotional and economic pressures. With euthanasia, they will be released from all these pressures and suffering.

Good luck!


Sat Sep 13, 2008 2:30 am
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Post Re: Can anybody help me to check the grammar of this essay?
thats confusing


Fri Sep 19, 2008 2:40 am
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Post Re: Can anybody help me to check the grammar of this essay?
i've edited to maintain your ideas but i would suggest more changes to help the ideas flow better. one sentence was hard to figure outthe one with the ???. it needs some work. i did not want to guess at your intended meaning. good luck

Euthanasia can have many advantages. Basically, euthanasia is limited to those who have brain defects, are comatose, or are near death. Patients who have food eating?? and treatment suffering?? is also a must. For these patients, the chance to socialize is nonexistent, their belief in the value of life has vanished, or their faith in the belief in existing no longer exists. Prolonging their lives is actually dragging them toward death and and increasing their pain. Therefore, promoting euthanasia matches their self interest.

Euthanasia also benefits their relatives. Their relatives are responsible for caring for them. But it is a waste of effort on a meaningful life for the sake of an unhappy life. It also requires a considerable effort to care for the needs of these patients. For these patients, relatives suffer extreme emotional and economic pressure. They are in a state of oblivion. Euthanasia will release all these pressures and the suffering.


Sat Sep 20, 2008 2:43 am
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