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Post grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
However, the First Amendment says that although every person can say what they wish, it discludes harmful and hateful pictures or texts.

is this right?


Fri Sep 19, 2008 4:51 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
I doubt that the Supreme Court would agree with your interpretation, because what is harmful or hateful to one person may be a thing of beauty to another. However, if you are asking about the grammar, "disclude" is not a word. "Excepts" (makes an exception for, or does not include) is better.


Sun Sep 21, 2008 4:05 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
Try this ...

Although the First Amendment says that all people can say what they wish, it excludes harmful and hateful pictures or texts.


Mon Sep 22, 2008 4:12 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
the word discludes should be replaced by excludes


Mon Sep 22, 2008 4:13 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
No, it's not right for a couple of reasons...

"every person" is singular, and then you have "they" (plural). So you could either do "every person can say what he or she wishes" OR you could write "although people can say what they wish"

As others have noted, "discludes" is not common usage. It's better to go with "does not include"

But even that isn't great. You should write, "it does not cover a person's right to produce harmful pictures or texts."


Thu Sep 25, 2008 4:30 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
Although the First Amendment says that every person can say what they wish, it excludes harmful or hateful pictures & statements.


Fri Sep 26, 2008 4:41 am
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Post Re: grammar sentence help please! How do i fix this sentence?
change discludes to excludes (discludes isn't a word) otherwise, I think it looks fine.


Sat Sep 27, 2008 4:46 am
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