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Please help me correct the following description in grammar and fluence?
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Hank Wu
Joined: Sat Mar 08, 2008 4:44 am Posts: 2
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 Please help me correct the following description in grammar and fluence?
Dear All: I am trying to write a description in English for the robot I created. Please help me correct my description in English.
"" This robot is able to travel on X, Y, Z direction (X for 100 mm distance long; Y axis for 200 mm distance long, and Z for 100 distance long). This movement is fully supported by excellent rigidity and accuracy. This robot's arm is able to spin at 8000 rpm speed. In addition, its brain is guarded and protected with eigth areas (two for top and buttom, two for left and right, two for rear and front). THis robot is armed by a machine gun which is capable of 11 bullets at one time. Once you press the buttom, the gun can be fully re-loaded in five seconds. "
In English, Can I say "eight areas" ? I am trying to describe eight pieces of covering to protect a cubic object"
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| Fri Mar 21, 2008 4:44 am |
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Big_Dog_Spike
Joined: Sun Jun 01, 2008 4:44 am Posts: 1
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 Re: Please help me correct the following description in grammar and fluence?
Yes you can say eight times. Bottom is the correct spelling for buttom or button like a button you push. Instead of at 11 bullets at one time, firing 11 bullets at a time or 11 bullets at once.
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| Mon Jul 14, 2008 4:23 am |
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hbar12
Joined: Mon Aug 04, 2008 4:45 am Posts: 1
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 Re: Please help me correct the following description in grammar and fluence?
My robot is .... for 100 mm; Y axis for 200 mm, and Z axis for 100 mm). Each arm is... 8000 rpm. In addition, .... protected on eighth sides (two for the top and bottom, two for the left ..... It's armed ... which is capable of shooting ... the button, " I would study the errors and learn from them and then put it in your own words again for practice and add thoughts.. You can't be armed by a machine gun or it armed you, he has with him. It wasn't spell checked. You can paste it in here and spell check anything. You repeated the robot too much and could have used that space to give more information like my robot or my plastic robot, all I can thing of is my green plastic robot more interesting too, but it might imply you have a red one and a metal one etc. lol
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